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16 November 2008 @ 06:03 am
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Here's an older piece of mine (from last year, I believe) for you guys to read and maybe pick apart. I always appreciate constructive crit, and even more so with compliments!

I dreamed a poem
as I lay abed (just now –
I swear it!)
it was beautiful
the way dust from a butterfly’s wings
is beautiful
But when you woke me up
to tell me you love me
The poem fled
its colour faded like
a once-vibrant cut rose
the immediacy of its loveliness
stolen by the harsh
feeling: exhaustedexhausted